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Solid start. Really interested to see where this goes!

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Thanks. I think I'll explore different settings and genres in disconnected stories for now, and I'll see later if I can weave some grander narrative around it.

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That's a great idea! Seems like that there'd be plenty of room to explore. I'd be really fun to see something connective unfold along with the way.

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I'll give it a shot ;)

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I think you strike a nice balance. It is good work you engage the reader in. It aligns the reader with the AI. How to make sense of this weird thing called humanity?

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Great work. The reader has to work a bit in this section to put things together, but you give us a lot of markers to help us find our way.

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Thanks! I did try to make it purposefully opaque as you're supposed to be seeing the story from the AI's perspective. But I hope the reader can understand the transformation that's going on underneath.

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Blast Off, Alejandro! Nice launch, liking the "inciting incident" of the wake-up scene. Keep going, looking forward to next scene.

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Thanks 😊🙏

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I like it.

Have you played with the Substack format a bit for the conversations? I could follow along, but I wonder if other methods (EG, playing with the "pull quote" function, or some other kind of indicator for the AI's point of view) might work well. This is an excellent start of something really cool!

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Thanks! Yeah, I'm not sure that's the best formatting possible but Substack is somewhat limited. I would use different fonts.

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I figured I would opine on the aesthetic in this case. The story is intriguing! I like what you have going here.

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Very good! All the best to you! I look forward to reading more of your stories in the future! 🤗

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Thanks !!

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Very Good start, I hope this will go ahead soon with new stories

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❤️❤️❤️

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Thanks!

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